The unknown warrior

Posts : 5 Join date : 2012-05-20

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Basics
Name(s):Anthony Rogers
Age:15
Appearance description: he has long gray hair and blue eyes
Gift description: Ability to create wormholes, portation "discs" or other spatial portals for transport between two non-adjacent locations.
Details
Personality: he is not afraid to meet new people.
Strengths: Strength by Anger
Weaknesses: he is weak to water
Likes: women, reading, and large areas.
Dislikes: screaming, and small areas
Brief History: one day the local bullies were walking around looking for trouble and happened to see Anthony and started to walk up to him he got scared so right when they were about to lay the first punch he didn't know what he was doing so summoned some kind of portal and escaped through it.
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Subject: Re: The unknown warrior Sun May 20, 2012 2:08 am

Yeah, I'm sorry. You're going to have to completely revamp your form. ;w;
Look at others for examples, if you'd like.

Posts : 5 Join date : 2012-05-20

Ebony wrote:: Yeah, I'm sorry. You're going to have to completely revamp your form. ;w;
Look at others for examples, if you'd like.

Subject: Re: The unknown warrior Sun May 20, 2012 2:12 am

Whoa... Um... Okay. Where to start.

You're in an Academy, and you were invited here. So you have to have a name. You also have to have an age, anywhere from 13-18.

You won't be able to wear a mask in the Academy either.

By Gift, we mean power. So if you have a power that somehow improves your stealth skills or whatever, fine. Go for it.

The only students who get weapons are students that have powers that need to be complimented with one. If you get a weapon, more likely than not you won't be able to get a sword.

Your history is also a bit... Melodramatic. Change it, please.

Posts : 5 Join date : 2012-05-20

Is good please say yes...

Admin Posts : 512 Join date : 2012-05-01 Age : 25

Edit your history, please. Remember, we post in third person here, so our creation is in third person too.

Also, it doesn't quite make sense, and should be a little longer. Your history, I mean.

Otherwise, you should probably add a picture, then I think it'll be fine... In my opinion. ^^;

Posts : 5 Join date : 2012-05-20

Im still new it won't let me add a picture :( it never appears and I will fix the first person pov's I did those on accident

Subject: Re: The unknown warrior Sun May 20, 2012 3:31 am

No, you just severely butchered the code...

Posts : 5 Join date : 2012-05-20

<^>(-_-)<^> FUCK YOU

Subject: Re: The unknown warrior Sun May 20, 2012 8:36 am

No need to get mad now. You just didn't do the code correctly. You can be reasonable and let us help you, or you can get upset and say things like that (which you may just be banned for! Hooray!). Your choice.